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BEFORE

Dear Sir or Dear Madam,
                                                                               
I come by this, you apply for a position vocalist especially for the artist X.
                                                                                                  
Indeed, I worked with my voice with vocal coaches such as *** and *** and my vocal coaches encouraged me and supported in my vocation to be backup singer.
                                                                                                      
My work was noticed and I received positive quotes on it by professional in Music Industry such as *** and ***, but also by vocal coaches such as *** and ***.
                                                                                        
My experience as a vocalist on a CD released by *** in France and various vocal groups permit me to train my voice for a mixture of voices and various musical styles. I also performed on stage in particular in France a few standard American musical productions such as "The Colporter," "Cabaret" Porgy and Bess", "Phantom of the Opera" where I got several solos in the two last ones.
                                                                                    
In my work as backup singer, I have not only worked my voice on different styles of music and voices, or develop a musical ear wanted to make through my tone, my harmonies to give sensitivity, emotion which could touch. I also want to support and complement the voice of the artist.
                                                                                                 
I have always wanted to be Backup singer of *** for many years, I follow her work and have worked and continues to work very hard for this. I have normous respect for the exceptional work being done that she or he (depend on the name of the artist) does and it touches me.
                                                                                                                  
The collaboration that I could offer or bring, could make is part of a process to be "serving" of the artist, listening vocally, emotionally and more generally artistically. My job could go in and the concept of the ***, the choirs softening whole.
                                                                                  
This will bring this little something that might be interest her or him as providing to his/her voice a complementary and a sweetness and tenderness.
                                                                              
I invite you to visit my PK (promo/press kit) online at www..... so you accountable for my work.
                                                                           
Please don't hesitate to contact me for further information.
                                                                   
Sincerely,
***

AFTER

To Whom It May Concern:
                                                                       
I am writing to apply for a position as a vocalist, specifically for the artist X.
                                                                                                                
I have worked with vocal coaches such as *** and ***. They have encouraged me and supported me in my vocation to be a backup singer.
                                                                                                      
My work was noticed and received favorably by professionals such as *** and ***, as well as vocal coaches such as *** and ***.
                                                                                                          
In France, I have performed in several American musicals such as "The Colporter" and "Cabaret." I also had solo roles in "Porgy and Bess" and "Phantom of the Opera." In addition to being a member of various vocal groups, I was a vocalist on a CD released by *** in France. These experiences have allowed me to train my voice for a mixture of tones and styles.
                                                                                                                                 
In my experience as a backup singer, I have not only worked to develop a musical  ear, but to develop a tone and harmony which will deliver sensitivity and emotion. Such intense, personal training will support and complement the voice of any artist.
                                                                                                                    
I always wanted to be a backup singer for ***. For years, I have followed her progress and have trained my voice in the hope of being able to work with her one day. I have enormous respect and appreciation for her exceptional abilities.
                                                                                                                            
My involvement could offer to serve the artist as a sounding board--vocally, emotionally, and artistically. I could also be of service with the concept of X's album. I can provide a little something extra by complementing X's voice with sweetness and tenderness.
                                                                                                                         
I invite you to visit my PK online at www..... for a more detailed description of my work.
                                                                                                       
Please don't hesitate to contact me for further information.
                                                                                   
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
                                                                    
Sincerely,
***
                                                                                                     
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